Who knew you would become a comet

by Bob Bradshaw
The Writer's Block
Second Place (tie), August 2020
Judged by Ron Singer


streaking away from us, our family
a trail of dust?

How could you jettison
15 years of marriage
and a daughter?

I am over you,
having burned
our wedding album

and tons of photos.
I ignore rumors
of your engagement

but Julie misses you.
Every day she checks her phone
for your voice–

a voice that
may take years
to reach her.


The conceit of desertion as a comet is original and apt. It works well in the first four lines, and then again in the last six. The detail about the voice mail that “may take years/to reach” the daughter makes for a strong ending: surprising, but totally apt.
--Ron Singer

  • July 2021 Winners

    • First Place

      The Three Fates
      by Laurie Byro
      The Waters

      Second Place

      If I Needed Someone
      by Bob Bradshaw
      The Writer's Block

      Third Place

      free spirit
      by Billy Howell-Sinnard
      The Writer's Block

  • June 2021 Winners

    • First Place

      Longfellow’s Wife
      by Ken Ashworth
      The Waters

      Second Place

      In My Next Life I Want to Return as an Animal
      by Bob Bradshaw
      The Writer's Block

      Third Place

      A Windy Walk
      by Paul A. Freeman
      The Write Idea